when i grow up

作文类型：记叙文、想象作文

适合年级：小学三年级、小学四年级、小学五年级

【形容词】

big、small、beautiful、many

【好词好句】

1. "i want to build a big house and a small house for my father and mother."

2. "there will be a garden and playground in front of the house."

3. "we will grow beautiful flowers and fruit trees in the garden."

【修辞手法】

【文字校对】

• "i will buy a big car. i will take my father and mother to many places"应为"i will buy a big car and take my father and mother to many places."

【写作亮点】

✓ 以第一人称展开真挚朴实的梦想叙述

✓ 空间布局清晰，屋舍、花园、 playground 层次分明

✓ 家庭情感自然流露，体现孝心与温情

✓ 未来时态运用准确，动词结构简洁统一