小学五年级英语作文范文及点评

✎作文范文

i can help do housework

i am a girl. my name is li ling. i’m in class three, grade five. i’m helpful at home. i can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. after meals, i can help my mother do the dishes. on sunday, i can wash the clothes. what about you? are you helpful, too?

要领点评

本篇作文的题目是“我可以帮助做家务”，作者主要叙述自己在家帮助做的事情，介绍自己的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详细，到位。

小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲自经历的事情，这样会避免在作文时显得太空，因为只有自己经常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。写作时还要注意大小写和时态。

my favourite food

do you know what this is? guess! its colour is yellow. it’s long and thin. it looks like a small boat and crescent. oh, it is a banana. do you know what that is? guess again! its colour is orange. it’s round. it looks like a small ball and a small lantern. oh, it is an orange. i like then a lot. i like ice-creams. i like to chew gum. chocolates and candies are yummy. i like them very much.

how about you? what’s your favourite food?

my favourite food 是很成功的文章，小作者并不是简单地列举出自己最喜欢的每一种食物，而是有详有略地进行介绍。整篇文章用词准确、语言流畅、没有语法错误。另外，文章中出现了一些生词，可见小作者是用心了。

my weekend

there are two days on the weekend, saturday and sunday. on saturday, i often go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and i often help my mother do some cleaning. on sunday, i always visit my grandparents in the morning and do some reading in the afternoon. after dinner, i often watch tv with my parents. at that time, we can talk with each other and say something happily. we often have a good time.

写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙周末的活动，记叙了周六和周日的上午和下午分别做了哪些活动及对活动的感受。

即：周六上午：舞蹈课→下午：做作业和帮妈妈做清洁→周日上午：看望祖父母→下午：阅读→晚上：看电视，与父母交流→感受：高兴和愉快。

我们还可以选取周六和周日中的几个比较主要的活动来写，先说明什么时间在什么地方由什么人做了什么事，有什么感受。再按照活动顺序把活动内容写清楚，最后抒发一下对这次活动或这个周末的感想。

时态：这篇短文我们可以用三种时态来写: a.一般过去时(主要描述你上个周末是怎样度过的);b.一般现在时(主要描述你经常怎样度过周末);c.一般将来时(主要描述你要怎样过周末)。这里我们来表述平时是如何过周末的，所以采用一般现在时来写。

注意：活动的相关表达方法可采用旧知识，eg.(例)起床get up，和新知识，eg. climb mountains去爬山中的un很容易错写成nu。还要注意不要出现病句，eg. “i often watch tv with my parents.”不要写成 “i often with my parents watch tv .” 词量上控制在50 ~ 80 之间。