a good friend of mine

作文类型：记叙文、双语作文

【成语使用】

【形容词】

good、very、other、third、fourth

【好词好句】

1. "she is very willing to help others."

2. "sweat covered both of our foreheads."

3. "this is what a friend is all about."

【修辞手法】

比喻："'sweat covered both of our foreheads'以具象画面凸显寻物之辛劳，暗喻友情的真诚付出"

【文字校对】

• "chen ying_i"应为"chen xi"

• "don work"应为"doesn't work"

• "bo_"应为"box"

• "disppeared"应为"disappeared"

• "e_pressed"应为"expressed"

• "don mean it"应为"don't mean it"

• "his name is chen xi"应为"her name is chen xi"

• "she learning not good"应为"she doesn't do well in her studies"

• "let me go to look for it with you"应为"let me help you look for it"

• "the third floor and the fourth floor"宜改为"the third and fourth floors"

【写作亮点】

✓ 中英双语对照呈现，体现跨语言表达意识

✓ 通过“找午餐盒”这一生活小事自然展现人物品质

✓ 动作描写与细节刻画结合，如“sweat covered both of our foreheads”增强现场感

✓ 结尾句“this is what a friend is all about”凝练有力，升华主题