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简单英语作文-保护动物

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简单英语作文-保护动物,中英双语自然对照,语义准确,节奏协调,动物描写动静结合,细节鲜活,富有画面感。

简单英语作文-保护动物

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主题: 关爱动物、文明游览、生命教育、童心观察、责任意识

june 23rd sunday sunny

it was very fine today. it was neither too hot nor too cold.he song and i went to beijing zoo in the morning. the animals were so interesting that everyone liked them very much.

we watched the bears for a long time. they were really lovely. one of them was standing and opening the mouth. another of them was sitting on the ground and waving its arm like saying hello to us. the other two guys were bo_ing. we had a good laugh at it. but at that time i saw a visitor throwing food to them. i ran up to him and stopped him, because some of the animals had been hurt by the food given by visitors.

all the animals are our friends. take good care of them if we really love them.

6月23日 星期日 晴

今天天气非常好,既不冷也不热。贺松和我去了北京动物园。动物们是那么可爱,大家都非常喜欢它们。

我们看了很长时间熊,它们太可爱了。其中一只站起采,张着大嘴;另一只正坐在地上挥动着它的胳膊,好像在对我们说你好。那边有两只正在练拳击,这让我们笑了个够。但是,那时我看见一个游客朝那些熊投喂食物,我马上跑过去制止他。因为以前就有一些动物被游客投喂的东西伤害过。

所有的动物都是我们的朋友,如果我们真正喜欢它们,就请好好保护它们。

精选读者点评

这个“练拳击”的熊真扎实!比课本里写的还充满力量儿,你眼睛真尖,心也热,后头那句“跑过去制止”,写得我手心冒汗。

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:日记、双语作文

适合年级:小学五年级、小学六年级、初中一年级

【成语使用】

张着大嘴、挥动胳膊、练拳击、笑了个够

【形容词】

fine、lovely、interesting、good、sunny、可爱、有趣、真正

【好词好句】

1. one of them was standing and opening the mouth.

2. another of them was sitting on the ground and waving its arm like saying hello to us.

3. all the animals are our friends. take good care of them if we really love them.

【修辞手法】

比喻:waving its arm like saying hello to us,以拟人化动作作比,赋予熊亲切灵动的生命感

【文字校对】

• "bo_ing"应为"boxing"

• "he song"应为"he song"

• "stand up"应为"standing up"(范文"standing"正确,但"stand up"误写为"stand up"未出现;此处实际为"standing"拼写无误,无需修改)

• "采"应为"起"

【写作亮点】

✓ 中英双语自然对照,语义准确,节奏协调

✓ 动物描写动静结合,细节鲜活,富有画面感

✓ 结尾升华自然,由观览升至生命关怀,情感真挚

✓ 时态运用基本准确,主干叙述以一般过去时贯穿清晰

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