what is halloween?

200字
主题:节日文化、民俗演变、象征色彩、西方传统、民间信仰

halloween is a holiday celebrated on october 31. by tradition, halloween begins after sunset. long ago, people believed that witches gathered together and ghosts roamed the world on halloween. today, most people no longer believe in ghosts and witches. but these supernatural beings are still a part of halloween.

the colors black and orange are also a part of halloween. black is a symbol for night and orange is the color of pumpkins. a jack-o-lantern is a hollowed-out pumpkin with a face carved on one side. candles are usually placed inside, giving the face a spooky glow.

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开头这句“halloween is a holiday celebrated on october 31.”太像词典释义啦!试试换成“每年十月三十一号晚上,街角突然冒出一堆小怪物,万圣节来了!”是不是活了吧!

一本有趣的书

400字
主题:阅读价值、理性判断、文化包容、精神成长

an interesting book

the da vinci code is really a good book! its very interesting. although i don have the knowledge of religion, i am crazy about it! however, myforeign teacher told me that some people who believe in jesus don like this book. they hold the opinion that the book tells them something wrong. because i know nothing about religion, i am not sure if it is true. i think that everything has pros and cons, we should learn the good things from the book and don care about the bad things. we can benefit from reading. we can learn lots of knowledge from books. lets read. books are the food of our spirit.

翻译:

《达芬奇密码》真的是一本好书,这本书很有趣。尽管我不懂得宗教知识,我仍然为之疯狂。但是,我的英语老师告诉我信仰耶稣的人都不喜欢这本书。他们认为这本书给他们灌输了错误的东西。因为我对宗教一无所知,我不确定它是否是真的。我认为每件事都有利弊,我们应该学习书中好的东西,不理会不好的东西。我们可以从阅读中受益,我们可以从书本中学到很多知识。让我们读书吧,书本是我们的精神粮食。

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标点太“省”啦!英文句号全用中文句号,引号也漏了一半,下次读完自己轻声念一遍,耳朵会帮你抓到这些小尾巴。

my english friend

250字
主题:友谊、活力、成长、才艺、青春、自信

my english friend name is fan junran.she’s twelve years old. she is tall, but not plump. she has black long hair, two big eyes and a lovely mouth. she often tells me lots of the funny things

luky has many hobbies. she likes sports very much. she can play basketball. she plays very well. she is good at the high jump, long-distance running and swimming.

she is very health, right? and luky likes art. she likes singing, dancing and playing the electronic organ. she dances very well.

she likes hip-hop so much. she is so cool when she dances hip-hop.

we are good friends now. i’m so happy to meet her. she is a very breeziness girl. do you want to be friends with her now?

初一:肖磊

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名字写错了哦,“fan junran”和“luky”前后不统一,还混了中英文标点!最后一句“breeziness”是想说“lively”吧?查查词典哈~