芭蕾梦 ballet dream

400字
主题:自我认知、亲子关系、兴趣发展、人生选择、成长反思

when i see the girls dance in the movie, i will be very jealous of their elegant temperament. i wish i am one of them, especially when my mother speaks highly of these dancing girls. actually, my mother once had tried to send me to learn ballet, but i was too small and couldn’t enjoy the class. i always skipped the class and then went to play with my friends. later my mother found the truth and she had gave up asking me to learn ballet. now i feel regretful, if i insist, i could be the girl that let my parents be proud of. the lucky thing is that i have find the things i am interested in and i will not give up.

当我看到电影里的女孩跳舞,我会很嫉妒他们的优雅气质。我希望我是其中一员,特别是当我的母亲很崇敬这些跳舞的女孩时。实际上,母亲曾经试图送我学习芭蕾,但是我太小了,不懂得享受这个课程。我总是旷课,然后去和我的朋友去玩。后来妈妈发现了真相,她放弃了让我学习芭蕾。现在我后悔了,如果我坚持,我可以成为让我的父母感到骄傲的女孩。幸运的是,我已经找到了我感兴趣的事情,不会放弃。

精选读者点评

“嫉妒”写成了心事,真好!后半段“找到兴趣就不放弃”,语气突然亮起来,像推开一扇窗,建议把“后悔”那句再揉一揉,别急着怪小时候的自己。

八年级英语作文-家教有必要吗?

550字
主题:教育负担、学习方式、成长平衡、理性选择、学校主体性

more and more middle school students are taking all kinds of priate classes at the weekend. are private classes necessary? there are two different views concerning this topic.

the people who are in favor of the idea hold the opinion that it will be better for us to learn from teachers than to learn by ourselves. in addition, we can consolidate what we have learned in class, which will do more good to our study.

despite the advantages stated above, the objectors don’t think it is necessary for students to take private classes. they advocate that it can easily lead to a bad habit that students will depend on private classes overly(过度地,过于).furthermore, students don’t have enough time to rest, which will do harm to their health.

as far as i am concerned, i would favor the latter view, considering that we can also learn knowledge as much as possible in school if we study hard enough.

越来越多的中学生在周末参加各种私人课程。私人课程是必要的吗?关于这个主题有不同的看法。

赞成这个观点的人认为,我们可以从中学到更好的学习,而不是自己学习。此外,我们可以巩固我们在课堂上所学的东西,这对我们的学习会有更多的好。

尽管有上述优点,反对者认为这是对学生采取必要的私人课程。他们主张,它可以很容易地导致一个不好的习惯,学生会依赖私人班过度(过度地,过于)。此外,学生没有足够的时间休息,这会损害他们的健康。

就我而言,我赞成后一种观点,认为如果我们努力学习,我们也可以在学校学到知识。

精选读者点评

这篇议论文结构挺清晰,正反观点都列出来了,结尾也亮明态度,这点做得好!平心而论第二段“学得更好”“更多好处”这些表达太笼统,换成具体例子,比如“数学压轴题有人点拨就豁然开朗”,立马就活了。

八年级经典英语作文-early to bed 早睡

300字
主题:生活习惯、成长教育、中西文化、语言智慧、身心健康

there is an english saying.it says,early to bed, early to rise, makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise. have you ever heard it before?it means that we should go to bed early and get up early.if we do,we shall be healthy.people must have enough time to sleep.we should sleep for 8 hours every day.so we must do our homework quickly and go to bed before 10 p.m.proverbs can always give us some enlightenment.to know some proverbs is good for us.

有一个英语说。它说,“早睡早起,使人健康、富有和聪明。“你有没有听说过?这意味着我们应该早点上床睡觉和起床早。如果我们这样做,我们应当健康。人们必须有足够的时间睡觉。我们每天应该睡8个小时。所以我们必须做我们的作业快速在10点之前上床睡觉。谚语总是可以给我们一些启示。了解一些谚语对我们有好处。

精选读者点评

这句“早睡早起”翻得挺顺,但后半句“健康、富有和聪明”直译有点硬,像字典搬家。试试把“wealthy”换成“有余力”?生活里谁真指着睡觉发大财呀~

爱惜时光

300字
主题:时间观、生命意识、价值判断、勤勉精神、哲理思辨

an english proverb says that time is money. i consider it (this) wrong. why? because we all know that we can earn money be work but can not in any way get back time (in anyway). for this reason, we may (can) say that time is more valuable than money.

many people do not know the value of time. it (this) is indeed a great pity. we must bear (keep) in mind that wasting time is equal to wasting your life.

英国有句谚语说,时间就是金钱。我认为这是不对的。为什么?因为我们大家都知道我们能够用工作赚钱,但无论怎样却无法把时间争取回来。基于此种理由,我们可以说时间比钱钱更宝贵。

许多人不知爱惜时光。这确实是可惜的。我们必须记住浪费时间等于浪费生命。

精选读者点评

这句“时间比钱钱更宝贵”写得真逗!“钱钱”是不是手滑了?略显后头“浪费时间等于浪费生命”,干净利落,有劲儿!