执着

350字
主题:成长、奋斗、信念、人生选择、自我超越

“try and try until you succeed.” this saying shows the importance of perseverance, i have found in my e_perience that only through hard work can we succeed. many people have failed in their work or studies, precisely because they had no perseverance life, in general, as in many things we do has never been easy. no one promised us what it would be.

so, if we want to succeed in life, we must be brave to win. the standard that differentiates people who succeed in life and those who don is perseverance.

标题:关于执着

内容:“的尝试,直到成功。”这句话显示了坚持不懈的重要性,我在我的经验表明,只有通过努力工作,才能取得成功。很多人都在他们的工作或学习,这正是因为他们没有毅力的生活,一般在我们做许多事,从来不是容易的。没有人答应,我们会是怎样。

所以,如果我们想成功在生活中,我们必须敢于胜利。区分的标准,人们在生活中谁成功,那些谁不就是毅力。

精选读者点评

“try and try until you succeed”这句英文写得挺顺,但后面中文翻译漏了主语,“的尝试”读着别扭;“敢于胜利”不是常用搭配,换成“敢于坚持到底”更自然。标点也乱,中英文混用没空格,下次写完自己轻声读一遍?

雪snow

550字
主题:自然之美、生命活力、纯真喜悦、季节哲思

at dusk,the weather became colder while the sky was gray,and the cold wind was blowing strongly.it seemed that it was going to snow soon.

a moment later,the snowflakes began to fall quietly.soon the land before my eyes was all white,like a beautiful blanket.then it snowed more and more heavily.the trees were all covered with white quilts.the whole city became a silver world.

the ne_t morning,it stopped snowing and cleared up.i went into the yard.looking far away,i saw a beautiful silver white world.a group of children were playing happily.some were throwing snowballs to each other,others were making a snowman.snow seemed to bring us warm and wishes.cold as it was,nobaby felt cold in the white world.

i love snow,because it is pure white.it brings us hope and vigour.

雪黄昏,天气变冷,天空变成灰色,冷风强劲地吹着。似乎很快就要下雪了。

一会儿,雪花儿静静地飘落下来。很快眼前的大地变白了,像个美丽的毯子。然后,雪越下越大。树儿披上了厚厚的棉被。整个城市变成了银色的世界。

第二天早晨,雪停了,天气晴朗了。我走进院子里,远远望去,我看见了一个美丽的银白色的世界,一群孩子正在快活地做游戏。一些在互相掷雪球,其他的在堆雪人。雪似乎给我们带来了温暖和祝福。尽管天气很冷,但是没有人在这白色的世界中感觉到寒冷。

我喜爱雪,因为它的纯净。它带给我们希望和活力。

精选读者点评

雪落得真静啊!“悄悄”这个词用得妙,比“慢慢”“轻轻”都更带点呼吸感。后文“银色世界”重复两次,试试换一个说法?比如“亮晶晶的城”!

高中英语作文

300字
主题:梦想、时间、自我蜕变、青春憧憬、职业理想

十年后的我 me,in ten years later

when we have nothing to do and are in a daze,many of us would have thought about how we would be in ten years.looking the rain outside the window,i couldn t help imagining myself ten years later.ten years later,i don t need to wear school uniform any more,instead of many beautiful dress and some se_y clothes.i would be a famous fashion designer.it must be very wonderful to go around the world,hold large number of fashion show.how great it is!

在我们没有什么事情做发呆的时候,很多人会想过十年后的自己会是怎么样的呢.看着窗外的雨,我禁不住想象我十年后的情况.十年后,我不再需要穿校服了,取而代之的是许多漂亮的性感的衣服.我会成为一名有名的服装设计师.到处环游世界,举行大量的时装秀肯定很精彩.多么的美好啊!

精选读者点评

这个“se_y”写得真大胆!美中不足小心哦,英文拼写要核对清楚,别让时髦变尴尬~后半段中文写得挺如临其境感,雨天发呆想未来的劲儿更是真实!

时光机

500字
主题:怀旧、亲情、反思、当下、感恩、责任

when i see the cartoon, i like to watch the cat machine very much, he has a time machine, he always helps his friend to fine something with time machine. the cartoon makes me think of what would i do if i have a time machine. if i have a time machine, the first thing i want to do is go back to the time when i play with my friend, he now moves to another place, i never say goodbye to him, i want to make it up and say goodbye to him. the second thing is i want to go back to the time when i shout at my mother, i regret about this all the time, i wish i had a chance to say sorry at that time. now i have to face the truth that i will never have time machine, i should cherish the time and thing i own now, be nice to my mother.

当我看卡通片的时候,我很喜欢看机器猫,他有一台时光机,他总是用时光机来帮助他的朋友找到一些东西。这个卡通片让我想到了如果我也有一台时光机,我会做什么。如果我有一台时光机,第一件事做的就是回到我和朋友玩耍的时光,他现在已经搬到另外一个地方了,我没有和他道别,我想要补偿并道别。第二件事就是我想回到我反驳母亲的时光,我总是为此感到悔恨,我希望我那个时候有机会道别。现在我必须得面对现实,我不会拥有时光机,我应该珍惜现在是时间和所拥有的东西,对母亲友好。

精选读者点评

机器猫那段见解透彻!“他现在搬走了,我没说再见”,就这句,比后面所有道理都重。下次试试把“没说再见”那个画面多写两笔?比如他背书包转身的样子,或者你攥着没送出去的玻璃弹珠……

拯救我们的城市saving our city

350字
主题:环境保护、公民责任、低碳生活、城市共生、生态文明

the environment of the city is getting worse and worse today. there are wastes, air pollution and so on. what can we do to save our city? about the wastes, we should sort the wastes, to see if they can be recycle used; use the reusable shopping bag instead of the plastic bags. about the air pollution, we should go to school on foot or by bike; we should also ask our family not to use car as much as possible, take the subway or bus instead. i hope everyone can see the environment problem and do the best to save our city.

如今城市的环境变得越来越糟。有垃圾和空气污染等问题。我们应该如何保护我们的城市?关于垃圾,我们应该进行垃圾分类,看看它们是不是可以回收利用;使用环保购物袋来代替塑料袋。关于空气污染,我们应该走路或者骑自行车去学校;我们还应该要求家人尽量少使用汽车,用地铁或者公交车代替。我希望每个人都能看到环境问题,尽量来拯救我们的城市。

精选读者点评

这篇作文把垃圾分类、少开汽车这些事写得挺的确,尤其“用环保袋代替塑料袋”这句,我办公室里正缺一个呢!但是“recycle used”这个搭配有点小别扭,下次试试“recycled”啊!

感恩教师

350字
主题:尊师重道、真情表达、成长感悟、节日仪式感

today is teachers day. we say happy teachers day to all of our teachers before class. they are very happy to receive our greetings. my class sends a flower to each of our teachers to show our thanks to them. yesterday, i made cards by myself as the gifts to teachers. today, i send the cards to my chinese, math and english teacher. they said the cards are very beautiful. i am e_cited that they like my gifts. teachers are important to us and they care much about us. i think they are as good as our parents.

今天是教师节,上课之前我们祝所有的老师教师节快乐。收到我们的祝福他们感到很开心。我们班给美味老师送了一束花以表示我们的感激之情。昨天,我亲手制作了卡片作为礼物送给老师。今天,我把卡片分别送给了语文,数学和英语老师。他们说卡片很漂亮。我很高兴他喜欢我的礼物。老师对我们很重要,也很关心我们。我认为他们就像我们的父母一样好。感恩教师节

精选读者点评

这句“他们说卡片很漂亮”写得真自然!后面接“我很高兴他喜欢我的礼物”,小错字漏了“们”,但那种扑通扑通的开心劲儿全在里头了。再翻翻课本里“高兴”的近义词,试试换一个啊!

追风筝的人 the kite runner

500字
主题:人性救赎、跨越时空的承诺、战乱与安宁、代际守护

last week, i saw a movie that impressed me so much. the story was called the kite runner. the story described a boy from afghan’s who lived the rich life once and then became poor and flet to america to seek for the new life. the protagonist had a good friend who helped him a lot, they lost touch. the protagonist owed his friend and he came back to afghan to make up his friend. but he only to find his friend was dead and left a small boy. the protagonist made up his mind to rescue the small boy from the gangsters. at last, he made it and he brought this small child to america to open the new chapter of life. the story is about redemption, it is never too late to make up the mistake. i also feel so lucky to life in the peaceful environment.

上周,我看了一部电影,给我留下了深刻的印象。这个故事叫《追风筝的人》。这个故事描述了一个来自阿富汗的男孩,生活曾经富裕,随后变得贫穷,逃往美国寻求新的生活。主人公有一个很好的朋友,帮助他很多,他们失去了联系。主人公亏欠他的朋友,他回到了阿富汗想要弥补他的朋友。但他发现他的朋友已经死了,留下了一个小男孩。主人公下定决心从坏人手里拯救小男孩。最后,他成功了,他把这个小孩带去美国,开启了生活的新篇章。故事是关于救赎,弥补错误永远都不会晚。我也觉得自己很幸运,生活在和平的环境中

精选读者点评

“救赎”这个词贴合情境!后半段写带孩子回美国那段,眼睛都眼前一亮,要是能把“gangsters”换成“塔利班士兵”或具体点的称呼,历史感就立住了。

时光机 time machine

500字
主题:怀旧、感恩、自省、当下、告别、理解

时光机 time machine

when i see the cartoon, i like to watch the cat machine very much, he has a time machine, he always helps his friend to fine something with time machine. the cartoon makes me think of what would i do if i have a time machine. if i have a time machine, the first thing i want to do is go back to the time when i play with my friend, he now moves to another place, i never say goodbye to him, i want to make it up and say goodbye to him. the second thing is i want to go back to the time when i shout at my mother, i regret about this all the time, i wish i had a chance to say sorry at that time. now i have to face the truth that i will never have time machine, i should cherish the time and thing i own now, be nice to my mother.

当我看卡通片的时候,我很喜欢看机器猫,他有一台时光机,他总是用时光机来帮助他的朋友找到一些东西。这个卡通片让我想到了如果我也有一台时光机,我会做什么。如果我有一台时光机,第一件事做的就是回到我和朋友玩耍的时光,他现在已经搬到另外一个地方了,我没有和他道别,我想要补偿并道别。第二件事就是我想回到我反驳母亲的时光,我总是为此感到悔恨,我希望我那个时候有机会道别。现在我必须得面对现实,我不会拥有时光机,我应该珍惜现在是时间和所拥有的东西,对母亲友好。

精选读者点评

“他现在搬到另外一个地方了”,这句写得真安静,像轻轻推开一扇门。后文“没说再见”四个字,比哭还倍感关切。别改,留着。

尝试新事物 trying new thing

500字
主题:独立意识、代际协商、个性表达、青春蜕变、真实自我

尝试新事物 trying new thing

in everybody’s eyes, i am a good girl, because i make the good marks in the e_ams and help my parents to do things. unlike other students, who will go against their parents, i follow my parents’ words. i don’t think that to do something goes against the adults is the wise choice, but i do want to do something new. recently, i want to cut my hair and make the short style. my mother doesn agree with me, because she thinks a girl should have the long hair. this time, i insist on my idea. finally, she supports me. trying something new makes me feel happy and be myself. the short hair makes me look like a cool boy and i like this style. my friends admire me to have the courage to change my image.

在大家眼中,我就是一个好女孩,因为我考试成绩好,还帮助父母做事。不像其他学生,会和父母作对,我很听父母的话。我认为做一些违背大人们的事情是不明智的选择,但我想做一些创新。最近,我想把我的头发剪了,留短发。我妈妈不同意我的做法,因为她认为一个女孩就应该留长头发。这一次,我坚持我的想法。最后,她支持了我。尝试新事物让我感到预约,做我自己。短发使我看起来像一个很酷的男孩,但是我喜欢这种风格。我的朋友都羡慕我有勇气去改变自己的形象。

精选读者点评

头发剪了?真酷!那句“像酷酷的男孩”让我笑出声,你写出了光,不是只写“我勇敢”,是让短发在纸上动起来。