my big family

100字
主题:亲情、成长、归属感、爱

my big family

i have a big family . i have a mother a father a grandfather and a grandmother

my grandfather is tom .my grandmother is mary .my father is john and my mother

is lucy . my name is jim .we are both happy .i hope my family more happy .i like myfamily

,too.

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名字全用英文,又没大写,像在填表格,家人名字是称呼,不是密码!

i like my family

150字
主题:亲情、成长、家庭、温暖、归属

i like my family

hello!i am mike smith.i have a big family.this is a photo of my family.i have a grandfather a grandmother a uncle a aunt a father a mother a brother and i.look.this is my grandfather jim smith.that is my grandmother mary smith.they are my uncle and aunt jack and lucy.and they are my parents jack and enna.this is my brother ben.

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句子太短,像电报!“this is…”“that is…”连着七八句,读着喘唯独气。试试把两三个小句捏成一句?比如“爷爷叫吉姆·史密斯,白头发,总爱给我讲老故事”,人就活了。

我的家庭

300字
主题:亲情、成长、学习、生活、归属感

my family

there are four people in my family, my father, my mother, my sister and me. my father likes reading. my mother likes cooking. they both work in leliu. they always go to work by car. they work hard.

my sister and i are pupils. i study in the primary school affiliated with shunde no.1 middle school. my hobby is collecting coins. my sister studies in _ishan primary school. she likes watching tv. we love our family very much.

参考翻译

我的家里有四口人,我的爸爸,妈妈,姐姐和我。我父亲喜欢读书。我妈妈喜欢烹饪。他们都在乐柳工作。他们总是坐车上班。他们努力工作。

我和妹妹是小学生。我学习在小学隶属于佛山市顺德区第一中学。我的爱好是收集硬币。姐姐在西山小学学习。她喜欢看电视。我们爱我们的家庭非常多。

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这篇作文写得挺当真!家庭成员、爱好、学校都交代清楚了,句子也基本通顺。唯独“乐柳”应该是“勒流”吧?地名写错啦,下次查查地图或问问家长哦~还有“爱……极其多”不太符合中文习惯,换成“特别爱”更自然。