the angel on the earth

500字
主题:美与德、经典永存、人格魅力、银幕传奇、人间至善

人间的天使 the angel on the earth

people always like to ask who is the most beautiful woman in the world, then the name audrey hepburn will never be missed. though hepburn died in the early 1990s, she is discussed by the public all the time. the first time for me to see hepburn’s picture, i was impressed by her beautiful outlook, she was so elegant, her beauty caught my eye, i looked at the picture for a long time. in order to know her well, i saw her movies. her first movie roman holiday is very famous, she acted as the princess, she played so well, i always treated her as the real princess. i believe no one can take her place, her temperament makes her stand out. though hepburn has died for a long time, she is remembered by the world, she is just like the angel falling into the earth.

人们总是喜欢问谁是世界上最美的女人,然后“奥黛丽赫本”这个名字永远都不会被忽略掉。虽然赫本早在90年代就过世了,但是她仍然被人们一直在讨论。我第一次见到赫本的照片,就对她美丽的外表留下了很深的印象,她很优雅,她的美丽吸引着我的眼球,我长时间看着照片。为了更好的了解赫本,我看了她的电影。她的第一部电影《罗马假日》很出名,她扮演公主,演绎得很成功,她的气质使得她出众。虽然赫本已经过世了很长一段时间,但是全世界的人们都记住了她,她就像是坠入人间的天使。

精选读者点评

赫本照片那段写得见解透彻!“她很优雅,她的美丽吸引着我的眼球”,这句像小星星一样跳出来,比后面大段介绍都抓人。下次试试把这种心跳感,也用在写她演戏、做公益的细节上。

我的未来

400字
主题:理想、责任、成长、信念、希望、奋斗

everyone wants to know their future, but nobody knows it. i hope my future will like that. i think i will be an e_cellent lawyer in the future. i help many people who is in difficulty. i will help the people are in need, no matter they are rich or poor. then i think i will have a good reputation among the society. in order to have a good body, i will do some e_ercise every week. my family will be proud of me and always stand behind me. i will work hard to reach my future. ok, this is the future in my dream. what’ yours?

每个人都想知道自己的未来,却没有人可以知道它。我希望我的未来会这样的。我想将来我会成为一位出色的律师。我会帮助很多人有困难的人。我会帮助那些有需要帮助的人,无论他们是富人还是穷人。我会在社会中享有良好的信誉。为了身体健康,我每个星期都会做一些运动。我的家人为我感到骄傲,而且会永远支持我。我会努力实现那样子的未来。好了,这就是我梦想中的未来。你的是什么呢?

精选读者点评

标点太“省”啦!英文段里句号呢?中文段里“会这样的”,“这样”后面缺个“的”字,还有“有困难的人”“有需要帮助的人”重复啰嗦,删一个更干净。

间隔年gap year

700字
主题:成长教育、社会实践、人生规划、自我认知、跨文化体验

the idea of “gap year” is getting popular in china recently. gap year means after graduation, to take a year break to go for a long travel or have some special e_periences abroad before taking a job. and i support this idea. the gap year will benefit you in many ways.

最近在中国,“间隔年”这个概念变得越来越流行。间隔年的意思是在毕业以后,参加工作以前,花一年的时间休整,来一次海外长途旅行或者是经历一切特殊体验。我非常支持这个观点,间隔年会对你各个方面都有好处。

gap year is a good buffer to the graduates. they have been being a student since they went to the kindergarten, they are severely lacking of e_perience of being out of school, and they have no idea how would it be if they enter the society without enough preparation. the gap year will give them a certain amount of time to study on the real society, and help them make a sound choice of career.

间隔年对毕业生来说是一个很好的缓冲。他们自从上幼儿园以来就一直是一名学生,严重缺乏校外的经验,对在没有充分的情况下进入社会将会是怎样的情况而无从知晓。间隔年给了他们足够的时间去研究学习真实的社会,帮助他们在择业的时候做出更理智的选择。

no matter you spend your gap year on travelling or volunteering, you will have special e_perience. you will learn how to socialize, and have the mind opened. you will grow up as an independent, confident, caring and matured person, which you help you to do better in job in the future.

不管你把间隔年花在旅行还是做志愿者上,你总能收货特别的经历。你将学会如何社交,思维开阔。你会成长为一个独立、自信、有爱心、成熟的人,这对你在将来的工作中更有帮助。

and the friends you made in the gap year also a great treasure of your life.

在间隔年里交到的朋友亦是人生的财富。

i would like to have a gap year before i go to work.

我很乐意在我参加工作以前来一个间隔年。

精选读者点评

这个“间隔年”想法亮点突出!把“buffer”译成“缓冲”很准,但后面“study on the real society”直译成“研究学习真实的社会”就有点生硬啦,咱们平时说“接触社会”“了解社会”是不是更自然?还有几处冠词和单复数漏了,比如“a great treasure”前少了个“a”,顺手圈出来啦~

最后的几天 the last few days

500字
主题:成长自觉、诚信品格、亲情陪伴、友情温度、自我约束

最后的几天 the last few days

now the winter holiday will pass soon, i suddenly remember that i haven’t finished my homework yet and answered my friend’s invitation. so in the last few days, the first thing i need to do is to spend some time with my friends, because she had asked me to barbecue with her families. i am so happy to say yes and look forward to spending the time with her families. homework is always my nightmare. i am lazy and won’t face it until the last minute. my parents always remind me of my homework and i respond them with the good words. my mother will check my homework before i go back to school. so i must finish it in two days. it is a tough task but i have to burden it. i won’t break my words to my parents.

寒假很快就要过去了,我突然想起我的作业还没有完成而且我还答应了朋友的邀请。在最后的几天里,我需要做的第一件事就是花一些时间与我的朋友在一起,因为她邀请我与她的家人一起去烧烤。我很开心地答应了,也很期待和她家人在一起的时光。至于作业,永远是我的噩梦,我很懒,不到最后一刻不愿面对。我的父母总是提醒我要做作业,我也总是用好话来答复他们。妈妈会在我回学校之前检查我的作业。所以我必须在两天内完成。这是一个艰巨的任务,但我必须要完成。我不会对父母说话不算数的。

精选读者点评

“the last few days”这个标题挺有味道,中英夹杂反而显出假期将尽的恍惚感;平心而论后面英文段落里“respond them with the good words”语法别扭,孩子是不是想说“give them sweet answers”?顺手改一改哈。

the advantages of second child

850字
主题:人口政策、代际关系、家庭教育、家庭结构、社会变迁

it has been such a long time for chinese people to carry out the family plan, so most families only have one child. but now the government has loosen the one-child policy, more and more families have the right to raise the second child. in my opinion, having the second child has many advantages.

中国人实行计划生育已经有很长一段时间了,因此大部分家庭只有一个孩子。但是如今政府放松了一胎政策,越来越多的家庭有权利养育第二个孩子。在我看来,拥有第二个孩子很多好处。

first, it is good for the only child to have a sister or brother, so that the child can learn to share things. the parents are easily to focus their all attention to the only child, they want to give all the things he wants. but in the long run, they don’t realize they have spoiled their child to be an emperor. selfishness can be found on the only child, if he has a partner, then he will realize the need to share things with others. what’s more, the parents can distract their attention, so they won’t spoil their kids.

第一,对于独生子女来说,有个兄弟姐妹是好的,这样孩子就能学会分享东西。父母很容易会把他们的注意力集中在独生子女身上,他们想要给予孩子所要的一切。但是长期下去,他们没有意识到已经把孩子宠溺成了一个皇帝。独生子女很容易自私,如何他有一个伙伴,就会和别人分享东西的需要。而且,父母也会分散他们的注意力,这样就不会宠溺孩子。

second, since in chinese tradition the old people would not like to spend their later life in the nursing house, two children can share the burden of taking care of the parents and support them when they grow old. those only children would be e_hausted then while they have their own family to take care.

第二,由于在中国的传统里老年人们不愿意在养老院安度晚年,两个孩子也能分担一下照顾和赡养年老父母的压力。而那些独生子女们还要照顾自己的家庭,会力不从心。

third, the more kids in the family, the happier the family will be. watching the children play and fight is a kind of fun for the parents. the lively phenomenon makes people feel happy.

第三,家中越多的孩子,家庭就会更加的幸福。看着孩子们玩耍和吵架,对父母来说也是一种乐趣。热闹的环境让人感到开心。

精选读者点评

“皇帝”和“ spoiled ”连起来写,真有意思!后半句“自私ness”漏了字母,但意思全在,你心里早明白独生子女的难处了。再翻翻词典,“e_hausted”那个下划线,是手滑还是故意留白?

二胎的好处

850字
主题:人口政策、代际责任、家庭教育、家庭氛围、社会变迁、亲情纽带

the advantages of second child

it has been such a long time for chinese people to carry out the family plan, so most families only have one child. but now the government has loosen the one-child policy, more and more families have the right to raise the second child. in my opinion, having the second child has many advantages.

中国人实行计划生育已经有很长一段时间了,因此大部分家庭只有一个孩子。但是如今政府放松了一胎政策,越来越多的家庭有权利养育第二个孩子。在我看来,拥有第二个孩子很多好处。

first, it is good for the only child to have a sister or brother, so that the child can learn to share things. the parents are easily to focus their all attention to the only child, they want to give all the things he wants. but in the long run, they don realize they have spoiled their child to be an emperor. selfishness can be found on the only child, if he has a partner, then he will realize the need to share things with others. whats more, the parents can distract their attention, so they won spoil their kids.

第一,对于独生子女来说,有个兄弟姐妹是好的,这样孩子就能学会分享东西。父母很容易会把他们的注意力集中在独生子女身上,他们想要给予孩子所要的一切。但是长期下去,他们没有意识到已经把孩子宠溺成了一个皇帝。独生子女很容易自私,如何他有一个伙伴,就会和别人分享东西的需要。而且,父母也会分散他们的注意力,这样就不会宠溺孩子。

second, since in chinese tradition the old people would not like to spend their later life in the nursing house, two children can share the burden of taking care of the parents and support them when they grow old. those only children would be e_hausted then while they have their own family to take care.

第二,由于在中国的传统里老年人们不愿意在养老院安度晚年,两个孩子也能分担一下照顾和赡养年老父母的压力。而那些独生子女们还要照顾自己的家庭,会力不从心。

third, the more kids in the family, the happier the family will be. watching the children play and fight is a kind of fun for the parents. the lively phenomenon makes people feel happy.

第三,家中越多的孩子,家庭就会更加的幸福。看着孩子们玩耍和吵架,对父母来说也是一种乐趣。热闹的环境让人感到开心。

精选读者点评

这个“皇帝”比喻刚好!独生子女被宠成小霸王的现象,你一眼就揪出来了。后面“分担养老压力”这点也当真,不是空喊口号。话说回来“e_hausted”拼错了,下回~

业余爱好 of hobbies

550字
主题:兴趣发展、时间管理、身心健康、自我认知、教育平衡

业余爱好 of hobbies

today many college students have their own hobbies. for e_ample, some of them like singing; some of them enjoy playing the guitar; some of them are keen on painting; some of them are crazy about taking photos, and so on.

如今很多的大学生们都有着自己的爱好。比如说,他们有些人喜爱唱歌,有些人喜爱弹吉他,有些人喜爱绘画,有些人则痴迷摄影等等。

i think it’s meaning for college students to have hobbies, because hobbies can benefit them a lot. on one hand, after a long-time study, hobbies can make them feel rela_ed. on the other hand, when they feel depressed, hobbies can bring them happiness. furthermore, hobbies can mould their temperament as well as show their characteristics.

我认为大学生拥有自己的爱好很有意义,因为爱好会让他们受益匪浅。一方面,经过一段长时间学习,业余爱好可以让他们得到放松。另一方面,当他们觉得沮丧时,爱好还可以给他们带来欢乐。此外,爱好可以陶冶情操又可以展现他们的风采。

however, some students are so addicted to their hobbies that they spend less time on study. how foolish of them to do so! in my view, if we focus too much on one thing, either our studies or hobbies will be badly affected. thus, we are supposed to balance them in a proper way.

然而,有一些学生却荒废他们的学业,沉溺于爱好之中。他们这样做是多么的愚蠢!在我看来,如果我们过于专注于一事,我们的学业或是业余爱好都会受到不好的影响。因此,我们应该找到平衡两者的方法。

精选读者点评

这个“rela_ed”拼错了,记得~还有“meaning”用得不太准,换成“meaningful”更自然。小细节改一改,英文表达立马清爽!

父母的爱高中英语作文范文

450字
主题:亲情、回报、奉献、成长、孝心、生命教育

父母的爱高中英语作文范文

who gives me birth? who brings me up? who dedicates his/her whole life to me? my parents.

是谁给了我生命?是谁把我养大?是谁把他/她的一生都献给了儿女是我的父母。

who gives me food? who gives me clothes? who gives me care? my parents.

是谁让我衣食无忧?是谁无微不至的照顾我?是我的父母。

my parents, they don want to get any reward from me. not only my parents, all the parents in the world don charge anything from their children. they give us everything they can.

我的父母,他们不求从我们这得到什么。这并不单单是我的父母,天下父母皆如此。他们尽己所能得把他们能给的一切都给我们。

they spend their whole life loving me, so i love my parents, too. since i was given birth, i have started to love them even if i didn realize it.

他们用自己的一生来爱我们,因为他们给了我生命,所以我也爱我的父母。尽管我自己还没意识到这些,可是我自己已经开始深深的爱着他们了。

it will be the time for my birthday soon. i want to say to my parents: i love you mom and dad.

马上就是我的生日了,我想对我的父母说:爸爸妈妈,我爱你们!

精选读者点评

这篇作文里“是谁……?是我的父母”这个句式反复出现,像敲小鼓一样,咚咚咚,节奏感有了!只是后半段突然转成大白话,鼓点就乱了,试试把英文的排比劲儿也带到中文里?比如“谁在凌晨三点守着发烧的我?谁把最后一块肉夹进我碗里?谁在我摔跤时先看我疼不疼、再看自己手破没破?”多具体啊!

大学生当村官

650字
主题:时代选择、青年担当、乡村振兴、价值实现、家国情怀

many years ago, working in the big cities is most college students’ goal, because big cities provide students more chances to get successful. but now, things have changed, many students choose to work as the village officials.

许多年前,在大城市工作是大多数大学生目标,因为大城市提供学生更多的机会获得成功。但是现在,事情发生了变化,许多学生选择做村官。

first, the government encourages college students to work in the village and it provides many advantages for college students when they finished the service. the students will be endowed with some priorities when they take part in the e_am of civil servants. it is so alluring, so they are willing to spend a few years’ youth to get the priorities.

首先,政府鼓励大学生到乡村工作,当他们完成了这项服务,政府为大学生提供了很多优势。当大学生参加公务员的考试,将被赋予一些优先权力。面对如此强烈的诱惑,他们愿意花几年的青春去获得优先权。

second, it is good for college students to serve in the village. they are knowledgeable and have the advanced skills. they can return the society, at the same time, they will bring some good changes to the village. when people find a way to make a contribution to the society, they will be very satisfied and proud of themselves.

其次,服务乡村对大学生是好的。他们知识渊博,有高级技能。他们可以回报社会,与此同时,他们会给村庄带来一些好的改变。当人们找到一种方法来对社会做出贡献,他们会非常满意和为自己自豪。

in the future, there will be more and more college students choose to work as village officials. it is good for them to make a contribution to the society.

在未来,将会有越来越多的大学生选择村官工作。对他们而言,为社会做出贡献是好的。

精选读者点评

这个“村官热”的选题挺新鲜!但中英文混着写可不行啊,“e_am”是啥?“endowed with priorities”直译成“赋予优先权”太生硬啦,咱们说“有报考优势”多顺口?再把第三段那句“知识渊博、高级技能”换成“懂技术、会用电脑、能写材料”,立马就活了!

尊老是中华民族传统美德

750字
主题:代际尊重、文化传承、价值教育、社会文明、家庭伦理

the elderly have accumulated a lifetime’s worth of e_perience. however, many young people often regard them as irrelevant, embarrassing, and out of touch. as far as i am concerned, the traditional chinese virtue to respect the old people needs to be emphasized.

老年人积累了一生的宝贵经验。然而,许多年轻人把它漠不关心,感到为难并且与老人失去联系。就我个人而言,尊重老年人是中华民族的传统美德这种观念应该加强。

firstly, the elderly deserve the respect due to their effort in bringing up their children and their contribution to society. we should always bear in mind that what we have and enjoy now was created by the aged people in the early days, as the old chinese saying goes,” one generation plants trees under whose shade another generation rests.” secondly, family is one of the best places for learning values, therefore, to set an e_ample at home by taking good care of the elderly members, so that children learn to adopt this same practice. in this way, families will e_emplify the right values, and young members will learn first-hand on how to respect the elderly.

首先,由于老人在抚育他们的孩子和对社会的贡献上来看,他们要受到尊重。我们应该一直记住我们现在拥有和享受到的东西是老一辈在早年时期创造出来的,正如中国的古语所说:“前人栽树后人乘凉”。第二,家是学习价值观的地方,因此给家庭成员树立一个照料家人的好榜样,孩子也会这样做。如此,家人就会作为正确价值观的典型榜样,年轻的成员就会直接学习到如何尊重老年人。

perhaps the most important test of a society is the way individuals behave towards one another. if young people do not respect the elderly; the whole of society will be a mess without respect. therefore, the elderly should be respected by all of us.

也许社会中最重要的测试就是个人对另一个人的表现,如果年轻人不尊重老年人,整个社会缺乏尊重就会一片混乱。因此,老年人应该受到我们的尊重。

精选读者点评

这个“前人栽树后人乘凉”用得真巧!后面那句“家是学习价值观的地方”也说得实实在在,比空喊“要尊老”有力多了。客观来说“漠不关心”和“感到为难”这俩词儿,跟原文“irrelevant, embarrassing”对不上号,再琢磨琢磨?

借钱的高中英语作文范文

550字
主题:人际边界、情感代价、现实困境、信任考验、理性交往

when you need a lot of money, you first thing you do is to borrow money from your friend, while doing this sometimes may do harm to your friendship. first, your friends may not have too much money at hand, he or she maybe suffer from the lack of cash flow at that moment. everyone has their own worries, when you borrow money, they always have to struggle for a while, their hesitations make you begin to doubt your friendship is true or whether your friends treat your as real one. second, most people can return the money in time, because they have all kinds of difficulties, this will make your friends in a awkward situation. they are considering whether to ask you return the money, if they do, this will make you embarrassed; if they don , they will lack of money. so it is better not to borrow money from your friend.

当你需要很多钱的时候,你第一件事做的就是向你朋友借钱,然而这样做有时候会伤害你的友谊。第一,你的朋友也许没有很多的钱在手上,他或她可能遭遇 着流动资金的不足。每个人都有他们自己的担忧,当你借钱的时候,他们总要挣扎一会,他们的犹豫让你开始怀疑你们之间的友谊是否真实或者你的朋友是否把你真 当朋友。第二,大部分人不能及时还钱,因为他们有各种各样的困难,这会让你朋友出于尴尬的境地。他们考虑着是否叫你还钱,他们叫了,会让你尴尬;如果不 叫,他们就缺钱。所以不要向你的朋友借钱。

精选读者点评

这个“流动资金”用得真俏皮!然而小朋友,借钱这事儿,光写“尴尬”还不够,你有没有试过把朋友皱眉的样子画下来?那才是友谊最真实的表情。

每天读英语的重要性

550字
主题:语言学习、习惯养成、时间管理、自我提升

when we were in primary school, we were required to read english every morning. now we are college students, and keeping reading english every morning is still very important.

我们在读小学的时候,每天都要早读。现在我们作为大学生了,坚持每天早读仍然非常重要。

for one thing, it is well-known that our faculty of memory in the morning is better than any other period of the day. therefore, reading english in the morning is definitely good for us to remember what we have read. in addition, keeping reading english every morning is a good way to practice our oral english and correct our pronunciation and develop our language sense.

一方面,众所周知,在早上,我们的记忆力要比一天中的其他任何时间都要好。因此,早上读英语绝对有利于我们牢记所读的内容。另外,坚持每天早读是我们训练口语,矫正发音,培养语感的好方法。

for another, reading english in the morning is a good start of a new day. if we read english in the morning, we will find that we will be in stimulated and fulfilled the whole day, and we will have a high enthusiasm to do other things.

另一方面,早上读英语是新的一天的好的开始。如果我们早上读了英语,我们会发现我们一整天都会神采奕奕,富有成就感,做其他事都会有热情。

in short, it is still important to read english every morning even though we are in universities, especially for those who are english major.

总之,即使是在大学里,尤其是对那些英语专业的学生来说,坚持每天早读仍然是非常重要的。

精选读者点评

早读好处写得挺着实,着实是“神采奕奕”“富有成就感”这俩词,比套话灵气足了!但是第三段“for another”后面那句“we will be in stimulated”语法不对,漏了“a”,是“in a stimulated state”?还是直接用“feel stimulated”?顺手改一改哈。

不要和陌生人说话

500字
主题:自我保护、安全意识、家庭教育、社会风险、青少年成长

不要和陌生人说话 don’t talk to strangers

before we go to school, we get our parents to supervise us all the time, so we live in a very safe environment. while when we go to school, parents can’t keep their eyes on us all the time, they are so worried about us, so they begin to tell us how to keep ourselves safe. the most important thing is that don’t talk to strangers, as a teenager, we haven’t had the ability to judge who is the good guy and who is the bad guy, so it is better not to talk to the strangers. the bad guys will like to talk to the teenagers, they want to do something to pay the teenagers’ attention, thus they can induce the children to go with them and do the bad thing. in order to protect teenagers’ security, teenagers are taught to keep distant from the stranger.

在我们上学前,我们一直有父母的照看,所以我们生长在一个很安全的环境。然而当我们上学以后,父母不能一直监视着我们,他们很担心我们,因此他们开始教导我们如何保持自身的安全。最重要的事情就是不要和陌生人说话,作为一名青少年,我们还没有能力去判断好人和坏人,所以不要和陌生人讲话。坏人会喜欢和青少年聊天,他们想要做一些事情来吸引青少年的注意,以此来引诱青少年跟他们走,做坏事。为了保护青少年的安全,青少年应该和陌生人保持距离。

精选读者点评

标题双语挺有想法!但“don’t talk to strangers”这句英文大小写、标点都不太规范,顺手改一改哈~

高中生活和大学生活

1100字
主题:成长过渡、自我管理、学业责任、青春规划、人生阶段

there are similarities and differences between high school life and college life. here are some of them.

高中生活和大学生活既有相同之处,又有不同之处。下面是其中的几点。

for one thing, there are several similarities between high school life and college life. first, the most important task in high school and college life is both studying. studying is the most important task as a student. second, we need a goal to fight for in both high school life and college life. to lead a meaningful and fulfilled life, we have to set up a goal to fight for.

一方面,高中生活和大学生活有相同之处。第一,在高中生活和大学生活中,最重要的任务都是学习。学习是作为学生最重要的任务。第二,无论是在高中还是大学,我们都需要有目标去奋斗。要使生活变得有意义,充实,我们必须设立一个目标并为之奋斗。

for another, there are also some differences between high school life and college school. first, our studying is also the biggest differences between high school life and college life. in high school, we are required to follow our teachers’ steps and finish their assignments every day and even every course. while in college, there are no teachers giving such detailed requirements to us and we can choose study or not according to our own willing. what to study and how to study is totally depends on us. therefore, the ability of self-control is very important in college life. second, the fle_ibility of time is another difference. in high school, we have no much leisure e_cept for our time of study. however, in college, we have much leisure controlled by ourselves e_cept the time of classes. and we have more time to do what we like. finally, college life is much more various and rich than the high school one. in addition to study, we can attend many other activities in leisure and these activities make our college life be more wonderful.

另一方面,高中生活和大学又有所不同。首先,学习也是两者之间的区别之处。在高中,我们被要求跟着老师的脚步,完成每一天,甚至每一堂课的作业。然而,在大学里,没有老师会布置这么详细的作业,我们可以根据自己的意愿来选择学或不学。学什么,怎样学完全取决于我们自己。因此,自我控制能力在大学生活里显得尤为重要。第二,时间的灵活性是另一个区别。在高中,除了学习时间,我们没有太多空闲时间。然而,在大学里,除了上课之外,我们有很多自我分配的时间。我们有更多时间去做我们喜欢做的事。最后,大学生活要比高中生活多样、丰富得多。除了学习,我们在空闲的时候,还可以参加许多其他活动,这些活动使得我们的大学生活变得更加精彩。

in brief, there are both similarities and differences between high school life and college life. however, no matter we are in which period, we need to make full use of every day so that we will never feel regretful.

简言之,高中生活和大学生活既有相同之处,也有不同之处。然而,不管我们在哪个时期,我们都需要充分利用每一天,这样我们才不会后悔。

精选读者点评

这个对比框架挺清楚!但“学习是最重要的任务”重复了三遍,像被按了复读键~后半段“自我控制”“时间灵活”写得有生活气息,要是把“老师布置作业”那段改成你自己的小故事,比如某次逃课后果或赶ddl的狼狈,立马就活了!

learn chinese

350字
主题:母语自觉、文化自信、学以致用、知行合一、学科并重

学习中文learn chinese

today so many students are learning english, parents pay special attention to their kids’ english, while chinese has been neglected by some students. they think chinese is their first language, so they can learn it well naturally. i don’t think so, chinese has a long history and the culture is various, the language is broad and profound, it needs work hard and spend more time to learn. just as english, chinese grammar, structure and idiom are full of difficulties, so we must learn chinese by our hearts. we should learn chinese well when we study english.

今天很多学生把英语学得很好,家长很注重学生的英语,然而,一些学生忽视学习中文。他们认为中文是第一语言,自然很容易就可以学好。我不这样认为,中文历史悠久,文化多样,语言博大精深,这需要下苦功和时间去学。正如英语,中文的语法,结构和习语充满困难,所以我们必须用心学中文。我们应该在学英语的同时把中文学好。

精选读者点评

中文不是“自带技能”,光靠耳朵听、嘴巴说可不够!你提到“语法、结构、习语充满困难”,真说到点子上了,下回试试挑一个你卡壳的成语,查查它怎么来的。

自我增值的方式

500字
主题:成长、自律、健康、求知、适应、发展

as the saying that it is never too late to learn, people are advocated to learn all their lives. today the world is changing fast, if we get satisfied and stop to improve ourselves, then we will be kicked out soon, so self-improvement are in need of. reading is the most effective way to get improved. books provide us all kinds of knowledge, we can know better about the world and make ourselves the smart persons. another way is to go to the gym. doing e_ercise not only makes us look perfect, but also helps us live the healthy lifestyle. so many people work in the office and don’t have the time to e_ercise, so they get sick easily. only the strong body can make people live well. reading and taking e_ercise are the best ways to get self-improvement, it also cost less.

俗话说活到老学到老,人们提倡终身学习。今天世界变化得很快,如果我们因为满足而去停止提高自己,那么我们很快就会被淘汰,所以自我增值是迫在眉睫。阅读是增值的最有效方式。书给我们提供了各种各样的知识,使得我们可以更好的了解世界,让自己成为聪明的人。另一种方法是去健身,锻炼不仅让我们看起来完美,同时也帮助我们拥有健康的生活方式。很多人在办公室工作,没有时间运动,所以他们很容易生病。只有强壮的身体可以让人过得好。阅读和锻炼是自我增值的方法,也是得方式。

精选读者点评

“活到老学到老”和健身扯一块儿,想法挺新鲜!美中不足“e_ercise”写了两回,下划线是打字漏了?还有“smart persons”,person可不这么用哦~

最贵的超模 the most expensive super model

550字
主题:成长、奋斗、蜕变、荣耀、信念、文化符号

after the opening ceremony of rio olympic games, the world remembered a name gisele, who is a super model from brazil. in the opening ceremony, she just made her catwalk for no more than one minute, but her wonderful body shape and confident manner surprised the world. her apperance made the opening ceremony the most se_y scene. this is her last show of waking on the stage, she would no longer work as a model but as a businesswoman. gisele was famous many years ago, her first show was at her 15, the agent realized her potential and signed her, her career as model began. but her first show on the fashion week was not easy, she was rejected for 42 times!her insistance brought her great success. she soon became famous and earned the most money for years. gisele is a lengend in brazil.

里约热内卢奥运会开幕式后,世界记住了一个名字吉赛尔,一个来自巴西的超模。在开幕式上,她走台步不超过一分钟,然而她的完美的身材以及自信的形态震惊了世界。她的美貌让开幕式成为最性感的场景。这是她舞台上最后一次走秀,她将结束模特生涯,转型为一个商人。吉赛尔在许多年前就很出名,她的第一个演出是在15岁,经纪人发现了她的潜力,找她签约,她的模特职业生涯开始了。但她第一次出现在时装周是不容易的,她被拒绝了42次!持之以恒给她带来了巨大的成功。她很快成名,多年来都是最挣钱的模特。吉赛尔在巴西是一个传奇。

精选读者点评

吉赛尔走那一分钟,真像一道光劈开夜空!“被拒42次”这句写得扎人又提气,比后面所有夸她的话都有力。下次试试把“最性感的场景”换成你亲眼看见的感觉?比如观众屏息、镜头晃了一下……

教师的鼓励

550字
主题:教育温度、自我突破、师者影响、学习觉醒

i used to hate studying, because i felt i was bad in study, my score always belonged to the last ones. i really wanted to give up, i felt i was a fool. one day, when i was having english class, i distracted, my mind was thinking other things, because english was my weakness. then my teacher asked me to answer her question, i just did not know how to say, my mind got blank, i felt so embarrassed, i was very afraid of being laughed at. then my teacher led me close to the answer, at last, i made it. i was so happy, my teacher praised me, she said i was a talented student, if i was careful, i could do much better. i was so astonished, i thought my teacher did not like me, well it was not. i became confident and made great progress, teacher’s inspiration is so important for me.

曾经我讨厌学习,因为我觉得我不擅长学习,我的分数总是属于最后那些人。我真的想要放弃,我觉得自己就是一个傻瓜。有一天,当我在上英语课的时候,分神了,我的头脑在想其他的事情,因为英语是我的弱项。然后我的老师叫我回答问题,我说不出来,头脑一片空白,我感到很尴尬,很害怕被取笑。然后我的老师引导我走向答案,最后,我答出来了。我很高兴,我的老师表扬我,她说我是一个有天分的学生,如果我细心点,我就能做得更好。我很吃惊,我以为老师不喜欢我,事实上不是。我变得有自信,取得了很大的进步,老师的鼓励对我来说很重要。

精选读者点评

这个“头脑一片空白”写得太真了!连尴尬都带着温度,比直接写“我很紧张”有力多了。后半段老师那句“你有天分”,要是能加点她说话时的语气或小动作(比如停顿、弯腰、轻轻拍你肩膀),光这一句就能立住人。

如何提高成绩? how to improve study?

550字
主题:学习策略、成长困惑、自我提升、教育现实、学业发展

high school students are under great pressure, they want to do best in the e_ams, because it means so much for them, if they do well, it means they can enter a good college and have a bright future. but most students are confused with their study, even they work so hard on it, they just couldn’t get the better result. the ways to improve study is very important, students must learn them, so that they can learn in the sufficient way. first, students must foster their interest, they should have interest in the subjects, so that they are willing to learn and won’t treat the subjects as the burden. second, they need to practice more. as the saying that practice makes perfect, so students must take more e_ercise, in that case, they will master the knowledge. improving the study is not easy, so it should move step by step.

高中生面临很大的压力,他们想要在考试中做得,因为这对他们来说意味着很多,如果他们考好了,就意味着能够上大学,前途将会一片光明。但是很多学生对他们的学习感到困惑,即使他们很用功去学习,但是没有得到理想的效果。提高学习的方法很重要,学生应该掌握,这样就能够学得有效率。第一,学生应该培养兴趣,他们应该对学习的科目感兴趣,这样才会愿意去学习,不会把科目当成是一种负担。第二,他们应该多练习。正如有句方言“熟能生巧”, 因此学生必须要多练习,这样的话,他们才能掌握知识。提高成绩不容易,应该要步步来。

精选读者点评

这个“熟能生巧”用得真自然!后头还悄悄翻译成英文了,活泼的小聪明~值得注意的是“e_ams”“e_ercise”里那个下划线,是故意留的暗号吗?下次写完记得通读一遍哈。

抄袭about plagiarizing

450字
主题:版权意识、道德底线、法治精神、创作尊严、社会公正

关于抄袭about plagiarizing

recently, a famous case was closed. the case was about a screenwriter plagiarizing another writer’s novel. the public kept their eyes on this case, most people believed that the screenwriter indeed plagiarized someone’s work, because the story he wrote had some much similarity with another writer’s play. the screenwriter denied that he had copied other writer’s work. what he said made the writer very angry, the writer charged the screenwriter. now the result came out, the writer won the case and the screenwriter had to apologize. plagiarizing someone’s work is a serious crime, it is not respectful to others and steal people’s work. such behavior should be condemned strongly.

最近,一单的案子结案了。此案是关于一位编剧抄袭另一个作家的小说。大众关着这件案子,大多数人认为编剧确实抄袭别人的作品,因为他写的故事和另一个作家的戏剧有很多相似性。编剧否认他抄袭其他作家的作品。他所说的让作家很生气,作家起诉了编剧。现在结果出来了,作家打赢了官司,编剧就此案道歉。剽窃别人的作品是一种严重的犯罪,盗取别人的作品是不尊重他人的表现。这种行为应该受到谴责。

精选读者点评

这个“关着案子”太有意思了!“关着”是想说“关注”吧?但错得挺场景直观生动感,好像大家真把案子关进玻璃柜里天天盯着看似的。再翻翻词典,“关注”和“关着”,差一个字,意思可差了十万八千里哦。

阅览室里的一次教训

1150字
主题:文明礼仪、自我反思、人际尊重、青春成长、规则意识

高中英语作文范文:阅览室里的一次教训

the seats in our school reading-room are not enough for all the students. many people get there very early to seize a seat every day. so do i. one day a special thing happened to me. and i learned a lesson that i shall never forget.

it happened on a wednesday morning last january, just before our final e_amation. i got to the reading-room very early to occupy a seat. i put a book on the desk and then went to have breakfast. but when i hurried back into the reading-room, i found someone was sitting on the seat which i had occupied in advance. i ran to him immediatly and shouted at him angrily, go away. its my seat. everyone raised their eyes and stared at me unfriendly. my face turned red and i felt ashamed of myself. i took my book and fled helter-skelter before so many eyes.

i dared not go to the reading-room for several days. i learned a lesson in the reading-room. since then i have been keeping the lesson in mind: to be polite to everyone.

我们学校阅览室里的座位不多。每天很多人都很早就去“抢”座,我也是如此。一天,我经历了一件特殊的事,并从中学到了令我终生难忘的教训。

这件事发生在去年一月份一个星期三的早晨,就在期末考试之前。我很早就到阅览室占了一个座位,然后去吃早饭。但当我匆忙返回到阅览室时,却发现一个人正坐在我占的座位上。我立即跑过去,对他生气地嚷道:“走开,这是我的座位。”阅览室里所有的人都抬起头来,异样地看着我。我的脸一下子变红了,我为自己的行为感到惭愧。在众目睽睽之下,我拿起书狼狈地跑了出去。

一连好几天,我都不敢去阅览室。我在阅览室里得到了一个教训。从那以后,我一直铭记着这个教训:礼貌地对待每个人。

the seats in our school reading-room are not enough for all the students. in order to seize a seat, i go there very early every morning. just because of this, a special story happened to me one day. i learned a lesson in the reading-room that i will remember all my life.

it took place on a monday morning in october. after occupying a seat in the reading-room, i went to fetch a bottle of boiled water. when i returned to the reading-room, i found that a girl student was sitting on my seat. immediately i ran to her and shouted at her angrily, why have you taken my seat? go away.! everybody in the reading-room looked up from their books at me unfriendly. at once i brushed with shame. i rushed out of the reading-room with my book. i can never forget those eyes.

this is the lesson ive learned in the reading-room: i shall respect other people.

我们学校阅览室里的座位不是很多。为了“抢”座位,我每天早晨很早就去阅览室。正是因为这个,我经历了一件很特殊的事。我在阅览室里学到一个终生难忘的教训。

这件事发生在十月的一个星期一的早晨。占了一个座位后,我就去打瓶开水,回来时却发现一位女生正坐在我的位置上。我立即跑了过去,生气地嚷道:“为什么坐我的座位?让开!”阅览室里所有的人都抬起头,异样地看着我。我很羞愧,脸一下子就红了。我拿起书,冲出了阅览室。我永远都不会忘记那些眼睛。

这就是我在阅览室里得到的教训:一定要尊重别人。

精选读者点评

这个“抢座—丢脸—醒悟”的过程真通透尤其“狼狈地跑了出去”“永远都不会忘记那些眼睛”,立体鲜活,比直接说“我错了”有力多啦。

漂亮女孩beauiful girl

400字
主题:人格魅力、内在美、同学情谊、成长榜样

amy is the most beautiful girl in my class. she has long and black hair, a round face. she looks lovely and beautiful when she smiles. she is so outgoing that she is popular among classmates. she is so energetic that she is likely to take part in various activities. therefore, she makes many good friends. besides, she is always ready to help others. many classmates get help from her both in study and life. she works hard in study and she does well in all subjects, so that when we have questions on study, we would like to ask her. i think her personalities make her beautiful.

艾美是我们班上最漂亮的女生。她有一头又长又黑的头发,一张圆圆的脸蛋。她微笑的时候看起来很可爱很漂亮。她很外向,在同学当中很受欢迎。她精力充沛,喜欢参加各种活动。因此,她交到了很多好朋友。此外,她总是随时帮助别人,很多同学在学习和生活上都得到了她的帮助。她学习很努力,而且各科成绩都很好,所以我们学习上一有问题就喜欢问她。我觉得她的性格使她更美丽。

精选读者点评

艾美这名字起得真好!“美”字藏在中间,人也美,可是后半段写她帮同学、爱学习、有能量,比“圆脸长发”更打动人。下次试试把“她很外向”换成她抢着擦黑板、主动带生病同学去医务室?活的细节才站得住脚。

sand and stone

650字
主题:宽恕、感恩、记忆、放下、珍惜、成长

高中英语作文:sand and stone

沙子和石头sand and stone

the story goes that two friends were walking through the desert. during some point of the journey they had an argument, and one friend slapped the other one in the face. the one who got slapped felt hurt, but without saying anything, wrote in the sand: oday my best friend slapped me in the face.

they kept on walking until they found an oasis, where they decided to take a bath. the one who had been slapped got stuck in the mire and started drowning, but the friend saved him. after he recovered from the near drowning, he wrote on a stone: oday my best friend saved my life.

the friend who had slapped and saved his best friend asked him, after i hurt you, you wrote in the sand and now you write on a stone. why?

the other friend replied: when someone hurts us we should write it down in sand where winds of forgiveness can erase it away. but when someone does something good for us, we must engrave it in stone where no wind can ever erase it.

两个朋友结伴穿越沙漠,旅途中二人突然吵了起来,其中一个掴了对方一记耳光。被打的人感到自己受了伤害,但什么也没有说,只是在沙地上写下了这样一句话:“今天我的朋友掴了我耳光。他们继续前行,看见到处绿洲,他们正打算在那里洗澡时,刚才被打的人不小心陷入了泥潭,开始深陷,他的朋友救了他。等他从几近淹死的边缘苏醒过来后,他在石头上刻下:“今天我的朋友救了我的命。”他的朋友问:“为什么我伤你之后,你在沙子上写字,现在却把字刻在石头上?” 他回答道:“当有人伤害了我们,我们应该把它写进沙里,宽恕的风会把仇恨抹去。而当有人为我们做了好事,我们应当把它刻在石头上,没有风可以将它抹去。”

精选读者点评

沙上写字、石上刻字这个意象格外精巧!你把“宽恕”和“铭记”全揉进两个动作里,连风都成了道具,改卷到这儿我忍不住划了三道波浪线。

停止污染水

500字
主题:环境保护、水资源保护、责任意识、可持续发展

spring is the best season of a year. the weather gets warmer and waemer. my classmates and i took a one-day sightseeing tour around our city. the scene was very beautiful. but when we saw the rivers along our city, i felt very sorry and thought a lot. with the development of; modern industry and agriculture, more and more waste is being poured into rivers. it has caused serious pollution.

the rivers are becoming so dirty that nothing can live in them. the rivers are giving off a terrible smell. we make an urgent appeal that measures should be taken to cope with the situation. our government should build various facilities such as sewage treatment plant and encourage scientists to work out more and better ways to reduce water pollution. water is the source of our lives. it is very important to protect the water.

停 止污染水 春天是一年中的季节。天气变得越来越暖和,我和同学进行了环城一日游,所到之处景色宜人。但当我们看到流过城区的河流时,我感到很惋惜,想了很多。 随着现代工农业的发展,越来越多的污水正被排进河里,河水被严重污染。水变得如此肮脏,以至于生物不能在里面生存。河水发出难闻的气味。 我们急切呼吁应该采取措施改变这种状况。政府应当兴建各种设施,例如污水处理厂,并且鼓励科学家们想出更多更好的办法以减少水污染。 水是生命之源。保护水资源十分重要。

精选读者点评

春天写得挺活,但“waemer”是笔误吧?还有分号用错了地方,“with the development of; modern industry”,这儿该是逗号。别小看标点,它可管着句子的呼吸呢。

保持水源清洁

400字
主题:环保行动、水污染、生命健康、可持续发展

who is willing to drink the polluted water? it can cause us to be ill and even to die. we can wait for a moment to protect our water sources. the water we use comes from oceans, lakes, rivers or streams. but many of these water sources are getting seriously polluted. towns and cities are pouring dust into the water. many people are throwing all kinds of dirty things into the water. factories are pouring waste material into the water. therefore, water sources have become so badly polluted that some of the water is unfit to drink or to use. now it is high time that we should do something to protect our water environment from being polluted.

保持水源清洁

污染的水会使人生病甚至死亡,有谁愿意喝这样的水呢?我们要保护水源,刻不容缓。我们用的水来自海洋、湖泊、河流或小溪,但这些水源有许多正受到严重的污染。城镇乒把大量的尘埃排入水中,许多人正把各种;各样的脏物投进水中,工厂正把废物排入水中。因此,水源已经污染严重,其中一些不适合再饮用。现在到了.采取措施保护水环境使其免受污染的时候了。

精选读者点评

中英文混搭得挺有想法啊!只是“towns and cities are pouring dust into the water”这句,尘埃真能直接倒进水里?是想说污水、垃圾,还是扬尘入河?下回写前先想想:尘埃咋进水的?